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I-25 song
She closed the French doors
and stood by the mantel,
Grabbed the fire poker
whopped him on the head.
Found a roll of duct tape,
bound him up real good,
kicked him down the staircase,
said you're lucky you ain't dead.
She packed a bag or seven,
threw 'em in the PT Cruiser,
stopped for gas and cigs,
put it on the interstate.
Didn't want to hear excuses,
didn't want to make it better.
She'd heard it all too often.
By now, it's too late.
He thought she was so sweet,
harmless and gentle.
She lit a cig and found I-25.
She didn't feel guilty,
knew she wouldn't miss him.
Drive By Truckers on the radio.
“It's great to be alive!”
Friends south of the border
loved Cuernavaca.
She could speak the language,
she'd get used to the heat.
Work some on her painting,
find a job somewhere,
Cerveza to drink and
tortillas to eat.
Scanned stations for a minute,
found Waylon Jennings.
The good life you promised
ain't what we're livin' today.
Big house and yard, yeah,
an island in the kitchen.
Wrong kind of island,
she's thinkin' hammock on the bay.
Gracey 2008
needs a chorus, bridge, something...any suggestions?
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Comment by gracey on July 7, 2010 at 10:05am
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Blown BY the wind down I-25 some days! Thanks, Stephen!
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Comment by stephen dijoseph on July 5, 2010 at 5:14pm
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love 'da chorus...
wondering....
....slammin down the wind
on I 25...? just a quick thought....
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Comment by Lillian Gaffney on June 30, 2010 at 6:26pm
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your welcome, Gracey! I love that you followed through with the suggestion...your my kind of student!
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Comment by wiffledust on June 30, 2010 at 3:34pm
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go, gracey, go!!! ;-)))
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Okay, Lillian,,,,I tried it and here's what I came up with.
She couldn’t help it.
She didn’t want to.
She couldn’t help it.
She didn’t even try.
She couldn’t help it.
She didn’t want to.
She couldn’t help it.
I-25
(Thanks, coach!)
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... do a fast write if you want to come up with a bridge/chorus... it will take your writing deeper...set the timer for 10 and write as fast as you can.
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Thanks!
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you've got some good imagery going on there, gracey!
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