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She closed the French doors

and stood by the mantel,
Grabbed the fire poker

whopped him on the head.
Found a roll of duct tape,

bound him up real good,
kicked him down the staircase,

said you're lucky you ain't dead.

She packed a bag or seven,

threw 'em in the PT Cruiser,
stopped for gas and cigs,

put it on the interstate.
Didn't want to hear excuses,

didn't want to make it better.
She'd heard it all too often.

By now, it's too late.

He thought she was so sweet,

harmless and gentle.
She lit a cig and found I-25.
She didn't feel guilty,

knew she wouldn't miss him.
Drive By Truckers on the radio.

“It's great to be alive!”

Friends south of the border

loved Cuernavaca.
She could speak the language,

she'd get used to the heat.
Work some on her painting,

find a job somewhere,
Cerveza to drink and

tortillas to eat.

Scanned stations for a minute,

found Waylon Jennings.

The good life you promised

ain't what we're livin' today.
Big house and yard, yeah,

an island in the kitchen.
Wrong kind of island,

she's thinkin' hammock on the bay.

Gracey 2008

needs a chorus, bridge, something...any suggestions?

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Comment by gracey on July 7, 2010 at 10:05am
Blown BY the wind down I-25 some days! Thanks, Stephen!
Comment by stephen dijoseph on July 5, 2010 at 5:14pm
love 'da chorus...

wondering....

....slammin down the wind
on I 25...? just a quick thought....
Comment by Lillian Gaffney on June 30, 2010 at 6:26pm
your welcome, Gracey! I love that you followed through with the suggestion...your my kind of student!
Comment by wiffledust on June 30, 2010 at 3:34pm
go, gracey, go!!! ;-)))
Comment by gracey on June 30, 2010 at 3:32pm
Okay, Lillian,,,,I tried it and here's what I came up with.

She couldn’t help it.
She didn’t want to.
She couldn’t help it.
She didn’t even try.

She couldn’t help it.
She didn’t want to.
She couldn’t help it.
I-25

(Thanks, coach!)
Comment by Lillian Gaffney on June 28, 2010 at 12:27pm
... do a fast write if you want to come up with a bridge/chorus... it will take your writing deeper...set the timer for 10 and write as fast as you can.
Comment by gracey on June 27, 2010 at 2:48pm
Thanks!
Comment by wiffledust on June 27, 2010 at 10:55am
you've got some good imagery going on there, gracey!

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